and NaPoWriMo day five:
GUESS WHO
LOVES YOU
Sundae Sunday comes and goes
Moody moody Monday froze
Chooseday Tuesday way to go
Wednesday Thursday don’t you know
Fish day Friday feeling blue
Saturday night, I’m missing you
Now’s the time to celebrate
It’s your party don’t be late
Which way ever the wind blows
Guess who loves you even so
Ever since you went away
I think about you every day
Don’t you know I love you hey…
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Have you taken The NaisaiKu Challenge? Yet???
Hi everybody, It's 1.47 am here and I'm going to get an early night - I'll be over to read what everybody else came up with in the (late) morning!
ReplyDeleteHey this is so cute....
ReplyDeletei was actually reading this poem in a particular tune...it has a song like feeling to it.
Nice read...
I like the mix of playfulness and seriousness! Very creative beginning!
ReplyDeleteI was thinking the same thing that Songofsea said..this does sound like a song.
ReplyDeleteNicely done, Guy.
xoox
AGirlNamedMe
You're great fun with your rhyme! And I like the undertone of the last line.
ReplyDeleteNice 1.
ReplyDeleteMay your love read dis n soon comes 2 stay
HARSHA
Mixed feelings come out in this, but the joviality always wins through.
ReplyDeleteyou did awesome!
ReplyDeletewooo hooo
http://eternitycallsus.blogspot.com/2009/04/beyond-reasons.html
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ReplyDeletei totally agree with the others - there's no way you could read this without singing along. lovely! and all that longing in the last few lines brings a smile, in a very longing way.
ReplyDeleteNow this is stuck my head. A good thing, I say!
ReplyDeleteSS: The Red Tent
Love the rhythm - cause for celebration! Enjoyed the words...
ReplyDeleteI wasn't surprised to read 'song of sea's comment - my mind was trying to make it fit a tune too! Maybe you should write one. ;)
ReplyDeleteHow sweeeeeet!
ReplyDeleteYou wouldn't want to hear me sing it! Nice piece - only 25 more to go!!
ReplyDeleteI'm loving all the creative poetry going on. A wonderful piece!
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