tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post6854014717579395197..comments2023-11-10T23:19:49.002+00:00Comments on Straight talking street talking sweet...: Monday Poetry Train Revisited & One Single Impression - TwilightAndy Sewinahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-85406107028207235052009-02-25T05:38:00.000+00:002009-02-25T05:38:00.000+00:00STG--I am going to try one of these--it's pretty c...STG--<BR/>I am going to try one of these--it's pretty clever!<BR/><BR/>Thanks for this--Beth P.https://www.blogger.com/profile/02621990661878989356noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-4654887282528344102009-02-24T22:38:00.000+00:002009-02-24T22:38:00.000+00:00Hi Sue@Tumblewords, thank you, thank you! You real...Hi Sue@Tumblewords, thank you, thank you! You really should have a go, you know!!!<BR/><BR/>Thanks Kitehorse, what can I say? You're amazing!!!<BR/><BR/>Hi Tammy, I'd LOVE you to have a go!!!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-2115669124954428572009-02-24T22:34:00.000+00:002009-02-24T22:34:00.000+00:00Thanks Floreta, I'm glad you liked it.Hi Utopianfr...Thanks Floreta, I'm glad you liked it.<BR/><BR/>Hi Utopianfragments, ain't it just!<BR/><BR/>Hi FP, I think my son Jack was actually playing his drum kit when I wrote this!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-31622196209863910682009-02-24T20:00:00.000+00:002009-02-24T20:00:00.000+00:00I love to try new things. Thanks! I've never texte...I love to try new things. Thanks! I've never texted but I'm sure I can find a theme. Well done!Tammy Brierlyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14673290512175050093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-61374029776895409182009-02-24T13:51:00.000+00:002009-02-24T13:51:00.000+00:00Jus h4D 2 tr4nsl8 ths:txt frm Cyb3rsp4c3 b4c frm d...Jus h4D 2 tr4nsl8 ths:<BR/><BR/>txt frm Cyb3rsp4c3 b4c frm d b4c 0f By0nd h0m B4 TW1L1GHT b4c frm d b4c 0f By0nd txt frm Cyb3rsp4c3Bruce Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12820133295308884414noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-18779909694922731292009-02-23T21:43:00.000+00:002009-02-23T21:43:00.000+00:00I'm off to click the link - you do this so well - ...I'm off to click the link - you do this so well - I love the cyberspace/sms lingo - gotta try this, gotta...Tumblewords:https://www.blogger.com/profile/04279038951489894119noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-33195841569325520142009-02-23T20:04:00.000+00:002009-02-23T20:04:00.000+00:00It has such a rhythm to it...I heard drums in my h...It has such a rhythm to it...I heard drums in my head as background while reading this! :~)<BR/><BR/>Very enjoyable~~Sherri B.https://www.blogger.com/profile/00834386300886224116noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-56292655348368655032009-02-23T16:48:00.000+00:002009-02-23T16:48:00.000+00:00very nice, poetry of the cyberspace, what a crazy ...very nice, poetry of the cyberspace, what a crazy thing to go to. i am sure the nook will ne a hit!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-22971861763251673102009-02-23T15:05:00.000+00:002009-02-23T15:05:00.000+00:00i like the 2nd one better for added affect. very u...i like the 2nd one better for added affect. very unique!floretahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18220834824793299258noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-35843171076607424202009-02-23T12:39:00.000+00:002009-02-23T12:39:00.000+00:00Thanks Gautami!Thanks Gautami!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-42376068862937828972009-02-23T12:05:00.000+00:002009-02-23T12:05:00.000+00:00Although I am not into text messages but it suits ...Although I am not into text messages but it suits the second verse. If it suits the mood, then its ok with me!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-4059653244271066312009-02-23T10:38:00.000+00:002009-02-23T10:38:00.000+00:00Hi Pretty You!!, with my first version I tried the...Hi Pretty You!!, with my first version I tried the same thing as you did with your re-verse Tanka, not as cool as yours though, but I tried...<BR/><BR/>Thanks Crafty Green, I would be honoured if you did one!<BR/><BR/>Hi Tony, it's a bit like a tax return, don't do it unless you have to!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-56035968908202647842009-02-23T10:33:00.000+00:002009-02-23T10:33:00.000+00:00Hi !nverse! Poignancy, Thank you, Point 1) metapho...Hi !nverse! Poignancy, Thank you, Point 1) metaphor? I'm not that clever... what I tried to do in version one was to use THE TITLE as three things, a)as the third line of a Haiku style verse. b) as The capitalised central title, to identify it as a NaisaiKu.. c) as the first line of the re-verse Haiku. In version two, I shortened THE TITLE so the 'sandwich' would take on what I thought was a blinking effect!<BR/>Point 2) Okay fair point, and I've taken your advise and ajusted the first version to complete words.<BR/>Thank you so much for your critique, evolution can be a painful process, sometimes!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-55767147581361632362009-02-23T10:17:00.000+00:002009-02-23T10:17:00.000+00:00Hi Susan, I tried to keep the texting language to ...Hi Susan, I tried to keep the texting language to a minimum and I also put up a text free version for us oldies! <BR/><BR/>Hi Jim, thanks for your informed comment, I don't do cell phones myself, unless I really have to and I've never used text language yet. However, in this little poem I felt it was the right thing to fit the Cyberspace theme, I tried to only use it like one might insert a French word or sentence into a piece now and then. Thanks for visiting STG.. and I really enjoyed reading your blog yesterday, thank you!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-70058772005955094472009-02-23T10:08:00.000+00:002009-02-23T10:08:00.000+00:00Thanks Sandy!Hi Deborah, It's just a bit of fun!Hi...Thanks Sandy!<BR/><BR/>Hi Deborah, It's just a bit of fun!<BR/><BR/>Hi Jukota, thanks, glad you fixed the thingy...<BR/><BR/>Intriguing me too Julia, intriguing me too!<BR/><BR/>Thanks Jeeves, I'm sure you can do it!Andy Sewinahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10023449074796269533noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-48728700627731348932009-02-23T08:50:00.000+00:002009-02-23T08:50:00.000+00:00Nicely done. I'm just not managing to fit into thi...Nicely done. I'm just not managing to fit into this form.<BR/>I don't know - me and forms :-)anthonynorthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06680944720744601697noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-22754817144263415632009-02-23T08:43:00.000+00:002009-02-23T08:43:00.000+00:00these naisaiku could be something to try...these naisaiku could be something to try...Crafty Green Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02486633917197181851noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-75808505150418352682009-02-23T06:32:00.000+00:002009-02-23T06:32:00.000+00:00nice try :)nice try :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-54230204118579456132009-02-23T06:02:00.000+00:002009-02-23T06:02:00.000+00:00Lovely write..But, i have two points to make- 1. I...Lovely write..<BR/>But, i have two points to make- <BR/>1. I just felt that the "sandwich" word (The title) could have been different, perhaps a metaphor for twilight or even its synonyms. It was just a passing thought, since i felt that repeating words in consecutive lines would hamper the enunciation.<BR/>2. The SMS lingo; like susan pointed out earlier, I feel that complete words would immensely add to the beauty of the write,(But, thats just me).Bharathhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16808147297983355521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-40750735833573720512009-02-23T05:42:00.000+00:002009-02-23T05:42:00.000+00:00I may not do NaisaiKu, at least not this week eith...I may not do NaisaiKu, at least not this week either. I will peek in at your link.<BR/>Susan's comment rings a bell with me, I don't do texting either. In fact I had Sprint disable it so I wouldn't exceed my quota. :-)<BR/>..Jimhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02982249173214655060noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-7355986192782424812009-02-23T05:31:00.000+00:002009-02-23T05:31:00.000+00:00I like the form. I really dislike texting. Sorry. ...I like the form. I really dislike texting. Sorry. I'm old and being quite stubborn about the evolution of how we communicate.susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14924982664582970754noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-2570185205076559882009-02-23T04:43:00.000+00:002009-02-23T04:43:00.000+00:00The NaisaiKu.. Challenge- You make it sound soo ea...The NaisaiKu.. Challenge- You make it sound soo easy and simple. I tried and tried and failed. <BR/><BR/>Really nice post.Jeeveshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02059095696768768954noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-71673638145816620332009-02-23T03:34:00.000+00:002009-02-23T03:34:00.000+00:00'Home b4 twilight' - very intriguing.'Home b4 twilight' - very intriguing.Julia Phillips Smithhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15392455413201190775noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-78679911444276298212009-02-23T02:44:00.000+00:002009-02-23T02:44:00.000+00:00Cool! Also, thanks for the tip on my comment thing...Cool! Also, thanks for the tip on my comment thingy. I think I fixed it. I'm am totally technologically challenged!Jukotahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00103565958637835237noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3042258266471605061.post-18336631299201605552009-02-23T02:41:00.000+00:002009-02-23T02:41:00.000+00:00Very clever, and kinda sweet, too!Very clever, and kinda sweet, too!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com