Tuesday, 30 October 2007

She dumped me...

MY NAME’S JOE…
My name’s Joe but they call me Slow ‘cos
I really didn’t know – she dumped me.
She never said a word - just dumped me!
But I suppose I should have known when
I caught her sneaking home – this morning.
That really should have been my warning.
Then I found her up in bed with Red
Hot Ged! And she just sat there yawning.
My name’s Joe but they call me Slow ‘cos
I really didn’t know - she dumped me.
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2 comments:

  1. crimsonflaw8 December 2007 at 04:00

    you visited my friend...am honoured.

    your poem is a marvel for it conveys not just hte craft but the character of the protagonist. and it shows how the poetic element influences voluntary thought and behaviour.

    i specially loved the typography. it was almost like a fragment from a column of a newspaper.

    Hot Ged was another clever ploy you used. wonderful work!

    way to go Danny!

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  2. Christine Swint11 December 2007 at 01:44

    I like the rap beat. I get the feeling this guy won't be down for long. Nice poem!

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