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Tuesday, 16 December 2008

Sunday Scribblings "Late"

Written for TotallyOptionalPrompts

FIRST THINGS FIRST

Sunday Scribblings

TOO LATE

(I FEEL FOR YOU)

I hope it's not too late for you

I feel the pain you’re going through

Sometimes you really have no clue

The hoops those clowns project at you

You paint your face but you’re still blue

These are the things I feel for you

If I were twenty-five oh yeah

With ice-blue eyes and auburn hair

If I could only be your man

I’d never ever let you down

These are the things I feel for you

I wish that you felt ten-feet tall

Then maybe you could scale that wall

It’s no consolation to you

But don’t you know I’ve been there too…

051208

29 comments:

  1. Honey, if I were but 25, it would be only you in my life.
    Lovely and well written.


    love-bd

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  2. A poem from the soul. Excellent.

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  3. why is it we never have that foresight when we are young and beautiful????

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  4. its so pure !! so much full of soul ... :) loved this one ...

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  5. "...ice-blue eyes and auburn hair..."
    This describes my hubby - he's the one who lifted me out of despair and misery!

    Wonderful thoughts - beautiful poem!

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  6. "The hoops those clowns project at you

    You paint your face but you’re still blue"



    Love these lines

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  7. What a wonderfully empathic poem.

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  8. "You paint your face but you’re still blue." How true this line is! Make-up is such an effective mask, or at least, we hope it is.

    I really like this poem!

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  9. execllent! I love your poem on LATE.

    And thank you for the suggestion you left on the comment of my post. I will do just that - upload a holiday tour and leave a comment where I'd put the link ;)

    Aloha,
    Liza
    Liza's Eyeview and A Maui Blog

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  10. "You paint your face but you’re still blue." This is such a powerful line. Very well written piece.

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  11. I like this very much. I'm glad you don't feel constrained to exact rhymes. The few slightly inexact ones add to the feeling of sincerity in this well constructed poem.

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  12. The ice-blue eyes and aubern hair should ensure a life with NO heartbreaks!

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  13. romantic
    enjoyed very much
    (here from Sun. Scribs)

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  14. great interp for 'late'. my fav line is: The hoops those clowns project at you /You paint your face but you’re still blue

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  15. Thanks Anthony!


    Paisley, Hi Jodi, beauty is in the eye of the beholder and I think that we are still beautiful, old as we are therefore we are. I think...

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  16. Thanks Pretty me!!


    Hi Bobbi, perhaps it's those ice-blue eyes!

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  17. Hi Gautami, Anytime, your place or mine?

    Hi Sue at Tumblewords, If only... nothing more to be said!

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  18. Hi Watermaid, thanks!

    Hi Linda, I think that's my favorite line too...

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  19. Hi Liza, hope you can post it now...

    BJ Roan, many thanks!

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  20. Thanks Granny, I try not constrain myself (if that makes sense).

    Hi Rinkly Rhymes, anything to stay away from heartbreak hotel...

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  21. Thanks Gel!

    Hi Floreta, hope you're not snowed in!

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  22. Thanks Noelle, my heart goes out to people, sometimes.

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  23. This is sooooooooo cool!!
    great words...
    i actually thought it would be a great song...

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  24. i like this one. i'm not twenty-five, but i identify...

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  25. Hi Nairobi, I sing this one to myself all the time!

    Hi ASP, it must be the empathy leaking out all over the place.

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