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Tuesday, 16 December 2008

Sunday Scribblings "Late"

Written for TotallyOptionalPrompts

FIRST THINGS FIRST

Sunday Scribblings

TOO LATE

(I FEEL FOR YOU)

I hope it's not too late for you

I feel the pain you’re going through

Sometimes you really have no clue

The hoops those clowns project at you

You paint your face but you’re still blue

These are the things I feel for you

If I were twenty-five oh yeah

With ice-blue eyes and auburn hair

If I could only be your man

I’d never ever let you down

These are the things I feel for you

I wish that you felt ten-feet tall

Then maybe you could scale that wall

It’s no consolation to you

But don’t you know I’ve been there too…

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29 comments:

  1. Cassiopeia Rises17 December 2008 at 17:07

    Honey, if I were but 25, it would be only you in my life.
    Lovely and well written.


    love-bd

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  2. Anonymous18 December 2008 at 10:28

    Thanks bd, I love your poetry too!

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  3. anthonynorth18 December 2008 at 11:11

    A poem from the soul. Excellent.

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  4. paisley18 December 2008 at 12:56

    why is it we never have that foresight when we are young and beautiful????

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  5. Anonymous18 December 2008 at 13:08

    its so pure !! so much full of soul ... :) loved this one ...

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  6. Unknown18 December 2008 at 13:52

    "...ice-blue eyes and auburn hair..."
    This describes my hubby - he's the one who lifted me out of despair and misery!

    Wonderful thoughts - beautiful poem!

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  7. Anonymous18 December 2008 at 16:48

    So do we start going out together?

    :D

    book of myth or reality?

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  8. Tumblewords:18 December 2008 at 18:22

    Aw, this is great! If only...

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  9. Jeeves19 December 2008 at 04:25

    "The hoops those clowns project at you

    You paint your face but you’re still blue"



    Love these lines

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  10. Anonymous19 December 2008 at 12:08

    What a wonderfully empathic poem.

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  11. Linda Jacobs19 December 2008 at 22:09

    "You paint your face but you’re still blue." How true this line is! Make-up is such an effective mask, or at least, we hope it is.

    I really like this poem!

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  12. Liza on Maui21 December 2008 at 14:31

    execllent! I love your poem on LATE.

    And thank you for the suggestion you left on the comment of my post. I will do just that - upload a holiday tour and leave a comment where I'd put the link ;)

    Aloha,
    Liza
    Liza's Eyeview and A Maui Blog

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  13. Roan21 December 2008 at 14:38

    "You paint your face but you’re still blue." This is such a powerful line. Very well written piece.

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  14. Granny Smith22 December 2008 at 03:08

    I like this very much. I'm glad you don't feel constrained to exact rhymes. The few slightly inexact ones add to the feeling of sincerity in this well constructed poem.

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  15. Rinkly Rimes22 December 2008 at 08:21

    The ice-blue eyes and aubern hair should ensure a life with NO heartbreaks!

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  16. Anonymous22 December 2008 at 12:08

    romantic
    enjoyed very much
    (here from Sun. Scribs)

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  17. Anonymous22 December 2008 at 19:12

    great interp for 'late'. my fav line is: The hoops those clowns project at you /You paint your face but you’re still blue

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  18. Anonymous22 December 2008 at 23:29

    Thanks Anthony!


    Paisley, Hi Jodi, beauty is in the eye of the beholder and I think that we are still beautiful, old as we are therefore we are. I think...

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  19. Anonymous22 December 2008 at 23:31

    Thanks Pretty me!!


    Hi Bobbi, perhaps it's those ice-blue eyes!

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  20. Anonymous22 December 2008 at 23:35

    Hi Gautami, Anytime, your place or mine?

    Hi Sue at Tumblewords, If only... nothing more to be said!

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  21. Andy Sewina22 December 2008 at 23:43

    Hi Watermaid, thanks!

    Hi Linda, I think that's my favorite line too...

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  22. Anonymous23 December 2008 at 16:16

    Hi Liza, hope you can post it now...

    BJ Roan, many thanks!

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  23. Anonymous23 December 2008 at 16:21

    Thanks Granny, I try not constrain myself (if that makes sense).

    Hi Rinkly Rhymes, anything to stay away from heartbreak hotel...

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  24. Anonymous23 December 2008 at 16:41

    Thanks Gel!

    Hi Floreta, hope you're not snowed in!

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  25. Noelle Dunn.... A Poet in Progress3 January 2009 at 16:53

    Wow, touching and so true.

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  26. Anonymous3 January 2009 at 19:35

    Thanks Noelle, my heart goes out to people, sometimes.

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  27. Anonymous6 January 2009 at 18:08

    This is sooooooooo cool!!
    great words...
    i actually thought it would be a great song...

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  28. Anonymous9 January 2009 at 02:08

    i like this one. i'm not twenty-five, but i identify...

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  29. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 23:26

    Hi Nairobi, I sing this one to myself all the time!

    Hi ASP, it must be the empathy leaking out all over the place.

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