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Monday, 27 April 2009

NaPoWriMo (27) Monday Poetry Train Revisited

Written for NaPoWriMo day twenty-seven
and for Monday Poetry Train Revisited
and posted to The NaiSaiKu Challenge?
Inspired by Gautami Tripathy

Mundane meltdown mood
cream and chocolate sprinkles
on triple sundae
TRIPLE SUNDAE
my Sunday tipple
vodka, creme de banana
melts moody Monday
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Now go to The American Sandwich game...

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10 comments:

  1. Julia Phillips Smith27 April 2009 at 16:58

    Can a meltdown be mundane? Don't they always have a certain flair?

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  2. Anonymous27 April 2009 at 17:33

    The Naisaiku seems to be evolving.

    I have tomorrow earmarked for Naisaiku and my first ever attempt at an American sandwich. I like the sundae/Sunday word play and the movement from 'triple' to 'tipple'.

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  3. gautami tripathy27 April 2009 at 18:02

    It isn't supposed to melt a moody Monday. Ah..well..

    I like the play of words here. And how long is that play of WORDS going to go on?

    Extending a hand, perhaps?!

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  4. anthonynorth27 April 2009 at 18:31

    I'd prefer your Mondays to Sundays :-)

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  5. Lluvia27 April 2009 at 21:03

    My thoughts are in all the wrong places with this one. Sorry!

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  6. Linda Jacobs28 April 2009 at 00:01

    I like the three lines plus the title format of Naisaiku best and this one is excellent with its wordplay!

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  7. Anonymous28 April 2009 at 05:14

    very tempting! your poem makes my mouth water!

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  8. Andy Sewina28 April 2009 at 09:54

    Hi Julia, yeah, I know what you mean, but if you stand well back, they do become a bit mundane after a few! Okay, maybe not, of course you are right. The truth is I just liked the way the words sounded!

    Hi Carole, I like to mess with things, but don't really want to stray too far with this form. Thanks!

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  9. Andy Sewina28 April 2009 at 10:02

    Hi Gautami, I do get a bit carried away with myself, sometimes. Thanks for extending the olive branch!

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  10. Andy Sewina28 April 2009 at 10:05

    Thanks Tony!

    Hi Lluvia, thanks for visiting STG..

    Thanks Linda, you can't beat a bit of wordplay, can you?

    Hi Artpredator, loved both your posts today, memembering... phew!

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