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Sunday, 28 December 2008

Sunday Scribblings "I Believe"

Posted for Sunday Scribblings I Believe prompt.

CHRISTMAS

WITHOUT

CHRIST

I believe I wouldn't want

Turkey without cranberry

Prayer without power

Cake without candles

Good without God

Sex without satisfaction

Time without Eternity

Presents without sacrifice

Smoke without fire

Carols without choristers

Word without spirit

Crackers without toys

Belief without fact

Pudding without brandy

Faith without imagination

Flocks without Shepherds

Christmas without Christ

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40 comments:

  1. floreta28 December 2008 at 01:12

    interesting. i suppose not everything goes hand in hand!

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  2. Devil Mood28 December 2008 at 01:18

    How about Man without Belief?
    This is puzzling.

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  3. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 01:21

    What an interesting set of couplets. Perhaps not everyone will see the connections, but it's very thought provoking all the same.

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  4. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 01:56

    Hmm...

    Challenging!

    One of my friends wrote a few weeks ago - if you believe in nothing, you won't stand for anything.

    This kind of reminds me of that a bit.

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  5. Andy Sewina28 December 2008 at 02:00

    Hi Floreta, what I was trying to say was that I can't imagine this without that etc. So why would anybody want to celebrate Christmas without Christ?

    Hi DM, it's been puzzling me for a few days now...

    Thanks Keith, I can see you have an understanding of these things.

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  6. Andy Sewina28 December 2008 at 02:02

    Hi Brunettekoala, I think you've hit the nail on the head here!

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  7. Roan28 December 2008 at 03:12

    I'm glad you gave us an explanation, before I was a little confused, but now that I know you were meaning you can't imagine Turkey without cranberry, the piece makes sense. In fact, it is extraordinary.

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  8. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 03:31

    You said very well..

    Everything thing is connected.

    guts wrenching out....

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  9. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 08:40

    succinct and creative way to present your beliefs. well-done!

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  10. Rachel Green28 December 2008 at 08:52

    sweet :)

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  11. jack sender28 December 2008 at 09:42

    nicely pared to the core.

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  12. anthonynorth28 December 2008 at 10:16

    Nicely done. Yes, without connections, what's the point? And talking of Existentialists ...

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  13. Dave King28 December 2008 at 11:48

    poetry without cant

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  14. Andy Sewina28 December 2008 at 14:04

    Hi everybody, this is getting a little confusing so I've added a new first line: 'I believe I wouldn't want' I hope this helps.

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  15. Andy Sewina28 December 2008 at 14:07

    Thanks BJ Roan, I didn't make my intention very clear, I hope the additional first line sorts this out.

    Hi Gautami, I'm so glad you made the connections...

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  16. Andy Sewina28 December 2008 at 14:14

    Thanks gel, I really enjoyed reading your contribution today.

    Thanks Leatherdykeuk!

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  17. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 14:17

    Thanks Jack, I'm on my way over to your blog right now!

    Hi Anthony, thanks for the wise words...

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  18. Anonymous28 December 2008 at 14:20

    Hi Dave, nice line.
    Very clever!

    If this piece was ever cryptic, I've just demystified it by adding a new first line

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  19. Doe28 December 2008 at 14:46

    nice one!!
    brought a smile to my face
    especially the pudding without brandy bit ;)

    cheers!

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  20. Unknown28 December 2008 at 16:46

    Wow - this was really very good! Great use of the prompt! The couplets made pictures in my mind.

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  21. Linda Jacobs28 December 2008 at 20:48

    This reminds me of that old song, "you can't have one without the other." Well, that's not the title, but those are some of the lyrics.

    I really like your poem!

    Oh, Buffalo wings are chicken wings deep fried then dipped into a mixture of melted margarine and Louisianna hot sauce. They are usually served with carrot and clelery sticks and blue cheese dressing.

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  22. quin browne28 December 2008 at 23:50

    i marinate then fry my buffalo wings!
    they are as lovely as this bit of work...

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  23. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 01:43

    Thanks Doe!

    Hi Bobbi, glad you liked this one.

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  24. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 01:47

    Hi Linda, I've got the tune to your song in my head now!
    Thanks for the Buffalo Wings explanation.

    Hi Quinn Browne, Thanks for the tasty comment, perhaps it's all in the preparation?

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  25. Tumblewords:29 December 2008 at 03:33

    Surely a special series of connections, strongly rewarding and thought provoking... nicely done!

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  26. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 12:02

    Thanks Sue@tumblewords, I like your belief too...

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  27. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 12:12

    these are my fav lines :


    I believe I wouldn't want


    Turkey without cranberry

    Prayer without power

    Cake without candles

    Good without God

    Sex without satisfaction

    Time without Eternity

    Presents without sacrifice

    Smoke without fire

    Carols without choristers

    Word without spirit

    Crackers without toys

    Belief without fact

    Pudding without brandy

    Faith without imagination

    Flocks without Shepherds

    Christmas without Christ



    ;)

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  28. Maree Jones29 December 2008 at 12:18

    I wonder how it would be different if it were "presence without sacrifice" instead of "presents without sacrifice". Great angle on the prompt. :)

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  29. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 12:45

    Hi Pretty Me!! I love you too!

    BW, you may well have a point there, I'll have to think about it some.

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  30. Susan Helene Gottfried29 December 2008 at 16:54

    Interesting.

    As someone who doesn't celebrate the religious angle of Christmas, can I just say I'd also be perfectly happy if the holiday returned to its religious roots and abandoned the gift-giving? Why wait for one day a year to give a gift? Why not do it when you see something that makes you think of someone else??

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  31. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 17:12

    Hi Susan, Great idea!

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  32. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 18:05

    Hey there...nice write.
    guess one thing is incomplete without the other...true.

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  33. Ana29 December 2008 at 18:58

    (Christ)mas - yeap that comes with Christ...
    though some take Turkey without cranberry , question of taste ;)

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  34. Anonymous29 December 2008 at 19:31

    Thanks Nairobi!

    Hi Annamari, you're right it's just a question of taste.

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  35. Winnie the poohi30 December 2008 at 09:09

    Some thoughts and some tradition lose meaning if it is not followed as it is supposed to be :)

    lovely poem!

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  36. Anonymous30 December 2008 at 09:16

    Thanks Winnie! There's something about tradition, isn't there?

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  37. linda may30 December 2008 at 11:49

    Well i liked it! Provin' your name! he he.

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  38. Anonymous30 December 2008 at 12:09

    Hi Linda, Thanks and thanks for visiting STG..

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  39. Anonymous30 December 2008 at 17:02

    Manchester without you... ;)

    I enjoyed this.


    ...rob

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  40. Anonymous30 December 2008 at 19:37

    Thanks Rob, I believe I wouldn't want that too!
    Thanks for your kind words!
    Andy

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