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Monday, 19 January 2009

Monday Poetry Train Revisited #11

Posted to Monday Poetry Train Revisited :
@ PIER HEAD
By the Mersey
yesterday
a carry out
to take away
cold night
corpse sleeps
newsprint blanket
cardboard cot
drunken dreamer
destitute
old at twenty
friend of mine
Frankie Vine
found dead
@ Pier Head.
AS21084
As submitted to Liverpool's Poem800 at: www.poem800.com
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16 comments:

  1. anthonynorth19 January 2009 at 22:45

    Tragic, but increasingly likely.

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  2. Anonymous19 January 2009 at 23:29

    Hi Tony, it was September 1984!

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  3. floreta19 January 2009 at 23:58

    this reads like an obituary.. short, maybe fittingly so..

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  4. Andy Sewina20 January 2009 at 00:39

    Thanks Floreta, you're spot on!

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  5. Julia Phillips Smith20 January 2009 at 01:53

    The short lines with no breaks really drives the imagery with the same relentlessness as discovering the news 24 years ago.

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  6. Jeeves20 January 2009 at 05:55

    Old at twenty. Sad!!!

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  7. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 07:02

    short lines like the short life of your friend...

    a well done tribute

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  8. Danika Dinsmore20 January 2009 at 08:55

    yes, AP, and the curt end couplets create an odd sing-song that works.

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  9. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 08:56

    Hi Julia, I tried to make them like newspaper headlines, I think...

    Hi Jeeves, you're old at twenty if you don't make twenty-one.

    Thanks Artpredator!

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  10. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 08:58

    Hi Danika, many thanks for that!

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  11. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 20:26

    Hi Sweet Talking Guy,
    I think I read at Poetry Train that this poem is in memory of a friend of yours? The style here of 2 or 3 words/stanza emphasizes his short life as well as the brutality of living on the streets. (with spare belongings, minute by minute, not even day by day ...at times)
    I'm sorry you lost your friend. It sounds like this was a long time ago.

    Hugs,
    gel

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  12. Anonymous20 January 2009 at 20:57

    I didn't see what what coming. It's always sad when this sort of thing happens, now or 20 plus years ago.


    Sorry I'm not able to be in Sale, Cheshire tonight. I was cool once.

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  13. Anonymous21 January 2009 at 23:18

    Hi Gel. It was a long time ago - but these things still happen.

    Hi Carole, so young, so sad!

    I didn't make it to the Sale Poetry night either, as I've come dome down with a stinking cold.

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  14. Stan Ski22 January 2009 at 07:42

    I remember the name but was never sure if he was a fictional character.

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  15. Anonymous22 January 2009 at 09:41

    Hi Stan, sometimes you have to change the name to protect the innocent... I worked with Frankie in the Isle of Man - real character, fictional name.

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  16. gautami tripathy23 January 2009 at 15:38

    Seems so familiar...

    clearly fading

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