I got the inspiration for this twin poem from two sources
Firstly from a prompt I saw on readwritepoem:
‘A woman left a poem for the milkman instead of a note.’
And secondly from the Saturday Scribes prompt:
Write a twin poem. With the theme; ‘What we need.’
My Mad Method: I wrote two poems, 1, a note for the milkman,
2, a little love poem. Then I cut out each line with a pair of
Scissors and randomly reconstructed the poems, the result is below.
WRONG NOTE
I wrote a note For the milkman
Two pints of sterra For the acrobat
A bokkle of orange To take to work
A pint of Jersey milk For her cornflakes
And a dirty big carton Packed with cream
Not the whatsit fingy Not that thin stuff
But the proper job Deep Devon clotted
A lump of sugar A slice of saffron cake
To suck in the rain The Hog’s pudding’s rising
This is a wish list
But somehow you know He got this poem instead
What we need is this I love you when I wake
I love you when I ache I love you in the morning
You’re my favourite Cup cake, butter fingers
If the truth be known
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I love it! I like the way all the parts managed to fit together. I think I might try that technique next time, of cutting up the lines and rearranging them.
ReplyDeleteMy mom and I got addicted to cream teas when we were traveling in England. Scones just aren't the same without Devonshire double cream. ;-)
Cutting, and fitting poem. I love this technique. I think I will try this sometime!
ReplyDeleteAnd its every woman's secret wish, to be loved like one loves that cup cake sucking at the butter fingers!
:D
Thanks D R, Yeah, Devonshire clotted cream is the business!
ReplyDeleteHi Gautami, thanks, and many thanks for the insight!
Nice diptych!
ReplyDeleteS.T.G.,
ReplyDeleteI admire your tenacity.
Sincere best wishes.
(I tried your technique
and all i made was
a pot holder.)
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I'm amazed that your method resulted in a poem that fits together so well. I guess that's the beauty of randomness.
ReplyDeletegood one...and i really like this method also
ReplyDeleteHey STG - Just thought I'd let you know that your cut-and-paste idea inspired me to try something, which resulted in this poem:
ReplyDeleteA Hesitation Before Birth
Very interesting, this cutting of each line with a pair of scissors. Love the part after 'this is a wish list'.
ReplyDeleteSO much fun! I like doing this with my journal entries, randomly cutting and pasting days of my life together. Makes me laugh! - Meg
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