Prompted by Totally Optional Prompts
this is my attempt at a 'climbing rhyme'.
TIC TOCK STOP
Climbing rhyming
tick-chiming-tock!
Skimming the clock
with a block in
a sock. Ticktock
up the clock face
of rock they climb,
making time tick.
Day time they come
at a run, just
for fun to find.
In their mind they
must wind the key
clockwise. Three times
back, tree trunk style for a while, ticktock, I'll stop!
This reminds me of a guy down by the docks who crawled out from under his overturned small boat one morning and asked me "Hey, What day'ja have?" He had to ask about four times before I understood, "what day do you have?".
ReplyDeleteYour Tick Tock Stop made me laugh, so I had to write something for you.
Thanks Jack, I appreciate that!
ReplyDeleteIt was written as a little experiment with the Climbing Rhyme form.
A tick-tock beat to it, fits the subject of clocks - but there's something more to it that just stays in the background.
ReplyDeleteHi Stan, it must be the little Elves, scurrying about up and down the grandfather clock case, the size of a giant oak tree to you or me, maybe.
ReplyDeleteThat was different but very enjoyable. Afterwards I thought there should be a mouse in there somewhere - I was singing about it running up the clock.
ReplyDeleteHi Anthony, yeah the little elves could well be mice!
ReplyDeleteI read it aloud liked the sound of it!
ReplyDeleteThanks Gautami!
ReplyDeletethis is great, whimsical yet sharp -- like skiing wonderful moguls in the mind... ;)
ReplyDeletelove the movement in this one!
ReplyDeleteGreat rhythms. Very fun to read!
ReplyDeleteFun! Like reading Shel Silverstein!
ReplyDeleteHi Rob, thanks for the comment, I enjoyed writing this.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sue at Tumblewords, Is that like a clock movement?
Hi witsblog.org, thanks for the visit, I love reading the things the children write over on your site.
ReplyDeleteThanks Linda, really enjoyed reading you beach poem, Florida? Phew!
It is great rhyming. It reminds me of Dr. Seuss (it is a compliment-I love Dr.Seuss)
ReplyDeleteIt is great rhyming. It reminds me of Dr. Seuss (it is a compliment-I love Dr.Seuss)
ReplyDeleteThanks annamari, that really is a compliment!
ReplyDeleteWas this hard to write? I think I would find a climbing rhyme very difficult. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThanks Nathan, it was my first attempt and I enjoyed figuring it out, it is however, quite a restricted form, so I don't know if I'll be doing many more.
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