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Wednesday, 27 April 2011

NaPoWriMo 2011 Day Twenty Seven

The words this week at Three Word Wednesday are:
Foolish, Relish, and Mercy.

Here's my attempt:

ETERNITY MELTS
Woden's day, woe betide the evening
Even now while the day is young there's death
Death without mercy for the numberless
Numberless, nameless nations of Woden.

Even though we wish it not so so soon
So soon it will come without mercy, death
Deathly death and the foolish are afraid
Afraid like Virginia Woolf even?

Yet there is life for us to live today
Today, tomorrow and beyond to hell
Hellishness of hell the foolish relish
Relishing the blood without mercy yet.

Eternity meets time externally
Externally melts time, eternity...
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22 comments:

  1. Ron.27 April 2011 at 10:33

    There's so much more going on here than just an acrostic. This is marvelous, not only for its marvelous structure(s) but for its content as well. Among your best this month, I think.

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  2. anthonynorth27 April 2011 at 10:52

    Great depth, words, form. Excellent.

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  3. Stan Ski27 April 2011 at 11:18

    A bit of everything in this... Great word combinations... think this would make a good performance piece.

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  4. Andy Sewina27 April 2011 at 11:25

    Thanks Stan, I was thinking of you when I wrote this. (only joking).

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  5. Altonian27 April 2011 at 12:03

    Amazingly effective use of words. Great poem, even without the acrostic element. My Troll would like this, I know I did.

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  6. Jae Rose27 April 2011 at 12:59

    Those last two lines are just mesmerising..will be figuring them out for a while..great piece..Jae

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  7. Mary27 April 2011 at 13:43

    Very artfully crafted! One would hardly know it is an acrostic. Eternity is.........

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  8. VL Sheridan27 April 2011 at 14:46

    I like the way it twists into something hopeful in the third stanza "Yet there is life for us to live today". There's something very serpentine about this piece, like a mobius srtip. Nicely done.

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  9. flaubert27 April 2011 at 16:29

    I didn't know it was an acrostic, Andy, now that is clever.

    Pamela

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  10. Sheilagh Lee27 April 2011 at 16:51

    Very cleverly crafted.

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  11. Laurie Kolp27 April 2011 at 18:06

    Mesmerizing form... brilliant piece!

    ~laurie

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  12. Anonymous27 April 2011 at 18:13

    Fantastic depth to this poem. It's a thinker!

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  13. Christine27 April 2011 at 18:44

    I get it now, very mesmerizing indeed. Woden, love this folklore, enjoyed this very much.

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  14. Gaurang Rao27 April 2011 at 20:23

    You expressed the words so well! Happy Easter to you and your family!

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  15. Unknown28 April 2011 at 01:25

    I most appreciate the tension and twist in the last two lines. Great way to end the piece.
    Here's my 3WW bit:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/27/childhood-folly/

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  16. The Poetry Bin28 April 2011 at 03:33

    A nice read - lots to think about - thank you.

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  17. Anonymous28 April 2011 at 04:41

    Speechless. I SO don't have it in me to write something like this...I'm in awe. ~paula

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  18. Anonymous28 April 2011 at 06:28

    I liked this. An unbelievable amount of repetition.

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  19. Iself28 April 2011 at 08:43

    I agree - perhaps your very best this month!

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  20. gautami tripathy29 April 2011 at 13:14

    This is one of your best. I read it aloud!

    an oracle

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  21. Thom Gabrukiewicz29 April 2011 at 14:49

    really some fine lines in this. I loved the way you weaved a very thoughtful poem.

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  22. rmpWritings29 April 2011 at 15:58

    i like the loop poetry feel. well crafted...so much so i missed it was an acrostic.

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