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Tuesday, 3 March 2009

Tuesday NaisaiKu.. Week Three

Written for and posted to The Naisaiku.. Challenge! - Week Three

sitting here waiting
strike while the iron's still hot?
deliberating

deliberating
strike while the iron's still hot?
sitting here waiting

sitting here waiting
strike while the iron's still hot?
DELIBERATING
strike while the iron's still hot?
sitting here waiting
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16 comments:

  1. Waiting fur wot? This isern't reel poertry! Sweet talka!!!

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  2. I'll have to think about this one.
    Or should I just say...?

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  3. Hi anonymous, very poetically put! So sorry you don't like it - I think you might have just invented 'The Anonymous Sentence' Phew!!

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  4. Hi Stan, 'I really can't make up my ...'

    what did you say?

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  5. nice thoughts here.
    what better ways to sandwich "deliberation"
    Liked this immensely!

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  6. Sitting here, Waiting. It seems eternal na. Nice one here

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  7. Hi !nversed Poignancy, The way you put it, it makes me wanna take a bite!

    Thanks Jeeves, so eternal were his thoughts that he's still sitting there, waiting to come to time. "Sould I go there," he deliberates, eternally, it seems!

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  8. Hi Gautami, tell me about it?
    -Andy

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  9. hope the iron is still hot ;)

    nice one !!

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  10. The more I see this form, the more I am impressed by its hypnotic potentialities.
    My contribution will be published tomorrow.

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  11. Hi Pretty You!! I'm still thinking about it, deliberating!

    Hi Spacedlaw,
    'hypnotic potentialities' Phew, Can't wait!!!

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  12. WELL, I liked it. I thought it very clever and funny.

    love-bd

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  13. Very much liked it, STG.

    It's interesting how the form is being played with, across the spectrum of contributors.

    I am not sure that I get anonymous' joke, for it seems (s)he is jesting; I like it, especially how the repetition invokes alternate meanings (which I have thought of as mandatory, but I suppose it isn't).

    Tschuess,
    Chris

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  14. Hi Bd, funny? I'm still sitting here waiting... (for the punchline).

    Hi Chris I think everything needs time to evolve, there's some good form breaking out in places and I think people will always interrpret things in their own way, so yeah!
    As for Anonymous he/she usually signs him/herself B, I presume it's the same person - I think it was their attempt at a Haiku - very poetic of them, don't you think?

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