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Tuesday, 6 November 2007

WI-9 Unforgettable!

UNFORGETTABLE!
mad insane
walking in the rain
we were talking on the train
about the day that we first met
we must have been
mad insane
walking in the rain
we were walking talking getting wet
the day that we first met
I’ve not forgotten yet
you’re unforgettable!

11 comments:

  1. I like the flow of this. It seems to beat like a drum- quick and sharp and rythmic.

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  2. Unforgettably musical! Nice poem...

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  3. I am always amazed by the way you use the words.

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  4. Oh beautiful, so lovely! I am glad I didnt miss you... thanks for sharing. 'Mad insane'..loved those words.

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  5. Very romantic. Something rare now adays! I love the mad insane phrase, very original!

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  6. Yes...I could feel the pulse and rushing of the rhythm in the words "mad insane." The repetition was great too!

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  7. i see i have missed out on a lot by allowing myself to be consumed by my own writing... this was wonderful... a hop scotch-y melodic masterpiece!!

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  8. wow! thanks for all the lovely comments...

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  9. Lovely!
    I liked the last lines in particular and the contradiction they introduce.

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