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Tuesday, 6 November 2007

WI-9 Unforgettable!

UNFORGETTABLE!
mad insane
walking in the rain
we were talking on the train
about the day that we first met
we must have been
mad insane
walking in the rain
we were walking talking getting wet
the day that we first met
I’ve not forgotten yet
you’re unforgettable!
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10 comments:

  1. writerwoman6 November 2007 at 16:28

    I like the flow of this. It seems to beat like a drum- quick and sharp and rythmic.

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  2. Tumblewords:6 November 2007 at 19:47

    Unforgettably musical! Nice poem...

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  3. Tiel Aisha Ansari6 November 2007 at 20:41

    Good rhythm.

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  4. Anonymous7 November 2007 at 08:47

    I am always amazed by the way you use the words.

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  5. Anonymous7 November 2007 at 13:24

    Oh beautiful, so lovely! I am glad I didnt miss you... thanks for sharing. 'Mad insane'..loved those words.

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  6. Marie8 November 2007 at 04:33

    Yes...I could feel the pulse and rushing of the rhythm in the words "mad insane." The repetition was great too!

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  7. Madeleine Begun Kane14 November 2007 at 07:02

    Very nice. I can relate!
    Mad Kane

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  8. paisley15 November 2007 at 17:27

    i see i have missed out on a lot by allowing myself to be consumed by my own writing... this was wonderful... a hop scotch-y melodic masterpiece!!

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  9. Andy Sewina15 November 2007 at 21:20

    wow! thanks for all the lovely comments...

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  10. Anonymous10 December 2007 at 14:18

    Lovely!
    I liked the last lines in particular and the contradiction they introduce.

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