Cunning
Degenerate
Emaciated
Here's my attempt:
UNDER THE LIME TREE
You could hear her coming
pounding running
Cunning as a fox one foxy lady
Shady as that day under the Lime
tree
She really knew her way across
the State
Degenerate reprobate and panting
Ranting and raving foaming at
the mouth
South of the city but well north
of hell
Well she did say that I would
lose my soul
Soled and high heeled shiny in shoe shined shoes
Choose me she declared I want to
want you
Chew you up spit you out onto the
street
Treat you like an emaciated fool
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But the lime tree seems so pretty..maybe there are worse things..or people to lose your soul to..good to see you back and rocking the words!
ReplyDeleteThanks Jae, you're right the Lime tree is the only pretty thing about this piece, maybe that's why I chose it for the title.
Delete'Chew you up spit you out onto the street
ReplyDeleteTreat you like an emaciated fool' love these lines the best makes her sound really nasty.
Thanks Sheilagh. She is a nasty piece of work, maybe that's what I like about her though.
DeleteRanting and raving foaming at the mouth
ReplyDeleteSouth of the city but well north of hell
Well she did say that I would lose my soul
A tough cookie this lady.I have 'fox' and 'fool' in my post too.Wonderful write Danny!
Hank
Thanks Hank, I'm on my way over to your blog right now.
DeleteGreat writing, but a lady she ain't!
ReplyDeleteHi Belva Rae, loved your story! I couldn't leave a comment on your blog though as it would only let me comment with a google chrome account which would mess up my web presence. I will try again later.
DeleteShe sounds like bad news.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem!
Thanks Alice, She is bad news, her name's Penney and she always turns up.
DeleteOh well Andy...I told you to take up Morris Dancing to occupy you leisure time:) Welcome back!
ReplyDeleteHi Rall, She's got me dancing like a cat... on a hot tin roof.
DeleteThe last 2 lines!! Simply loved them.. they tell you how cunning she really is!! Well done :)
ReplyDeleteThanks for the visit, I enjoyed reading your little story too.
DeleteI really enjoyed the last line too.
ReplyDeleteThanks Sancho!
DeleteWell done! I liked the poem a lot -- you really showed her for the rapacious female she was!
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