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Wednesday, 9 May 2012

Three Word Wednesday CCLXXI

3WW
Dampen
Keep
Tremble

Here's mine:

POETIC FLASH FICTION IN 51 SYLLABLES
He begins to tremble as he asks his god for forgiveness again.He dampens it down, turning his thoughts into words as he starts to pray. The deeper he digs the more clues he keeps on finding, don't tell the judge. 09052012/1


DON'T TELL 
THE JUDGE
The deeper we dig 
the more clues we 
keep on finding, 
don't tell the judge.
They dampen it down 
turning their thoughts into 
words, as they start to pray
he begins to tremble 
as he asks his god 
for forgiveness again.
09052012

11 comments:

  1. Andy, This is a nice piece. Also, Congratu-lations on completing the writing for April. That is an impressive undertaking. And thanks for catching my oops! last week.
    MaryAnn at Writer's Daybook.

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  2. This rolls in both directions as if that is the natural flow. Hard to achieve. Quite nicely done.

    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2012/05/09/i-am-lost/

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  3. Don't tell the judge. It sounds like a man is guilty and they know it because the more they dig, the more dirt they find. Hope I got that right. Sounds like the guy is guilty !~! I say tell the judge and be damned... haha

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  4. I think I like the first one better, although both great.

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  5. I love this piece of flash..they stand alone brilliantly but together also add more shades to the scene..Jae

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  6. Love how you inverted the first to make the second. Brilliant!

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  7. I enjoyed both of these, and particularly enjoyed the contrasts between them. Excellent writing.

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