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Wednesday 27 April 2011

NaPoWriMo 2011 Day Twenty Seven

The words this week at Three Word Wednesday are:
Foolish, Relish, and Mercy.

Here's my attempt:

ETERNITY MELTS
Woden's day, woe betide the evening
Even now while the day is young there's death
Death without mercy for the numberless
Numberless, nameless nations of Woden.

Even though we wish it not so so soon
So soon it will come without mercy, death
Deathly death and the foolish are afraid
Afraid like Virginia Woolf even?

Yet there is life for us to live today
Today, tomorrow and beyond to hell
Hellishness of hell the foolish relish
Relishing the blood without mercy yet.

Eternity meets time externally
Externally melts time, eternity...
27042011

Posted to Writer's Island

22 comments:

  1. There's so much more going on here than just an acrostic. This is marvelous, not only for its marvelous structure(s) but for its content as well. Among your best this month, I think.

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  2. Great depth, words, form. Excellent.

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  3. A bit of everything in this... Great word combinations... think this would make a good performance piece.

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  4. Thanks Stan, I was thinking of you when I wrote this. (only joking).

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  5. Amazingly effective use of words. Great poem, even without the acrostic element. My Troll would like this, I know I did.

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  6. Those last two lines are just mesmerising..will be figuring them out for a while..great piece..Jae

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  7. Very artfully crafted! One would hardly know it is an acrostic. Eternity is.........

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  8. I like the way it twists into something hopeful in the third stanza "Yet there is life for us to live today". There's something very serpentine about this piece, like a mobius srtip. Nicely done.

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  9. I didn't know it was an acrostic, Andy, now that is clever.

    Pamela

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  10. Mesmerizing form... brilliant piece!

    ~laurie

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  11. Fantastic depth to this poem. It's a thinker!

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  12. I get it now, very mesmerizing indeed. Woden, love this folklore, enjoyed this very much.

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  13. You expressed the words so well! Happy Easter to you and your family!

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  14. I most appreciate the tension and twist in the last two lines. Great way to end the piece.
    Here's my 3WW bit:
    http://www.kimnelsonwrites.com/2011/04/27/childhood-folly/

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  15. Speechless. I SO don't have it in me to write something like this...I'm in awe. ~paula

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  16. I liked this. An unbelievable amount of repetition.

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  17. I agree - perhaps your very best this month!

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  18. This is one of your best. I read it aloud!

    an oracle

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  19. really some fine lines in this. I loved the way you weaved a very thoughtful poem.

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  20. i like the loop poetry feel. well crafted...so much so i missed it was an acrostic.

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